This is what I have so far for the advice poster.
As with everything so far, it doesn't feel complete.
I may mess with it more before I say it's finished.
Maybe.
As with everything so far, it doesn't feel complete.
I may mess with it more before I say it's finished.
Maybe.
I really like it! I like what is says, I like the image.
ReplyDeleteI can see what you mean by it seems incomplete. I am not really sure what exactly you could do to it though... Mess with the font, maybe? or emphasize "ocean" and "ideas" maybe?
I think it is perfectly fine if you want to leave it how it is. If you change anything, I would not make it too drastic.
Also: "Spat out by Joshua Worley somwhere around 10:13 PM "
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After staring at it for a minute or so, why not try adding a little touch of white either within the font, a word, or around the text. You could even add a white bar underneath the bottom text and above the upper text. Not too much white, otherwise it takes away from the fishing wire and light bulb, and you wouldn't want that.
ReplyDeleteIt's just a suggestion, I am trying to help you make this feel completed.
YEAH 3 (NOW 4) USELESS ATTEMPTS AT FREE FOOD!
ReplyDeleteFirst- LOVE the idea. Great "ad copy" (or advice), nice abstracted ocean, love the thin line quality of the fishing hook, the white creates contrast so the fishing line is visible, subtle gradient, and the black creates strong readability.
ReplyDeleteSecond- I would rearrange it. Centered image and centered text is too predictable. Try using left, right or justified alignment. Create some tension in the placement of the bulb and the circles of the water. The outline on the highlights of the bulb are flattening out the 3D effect. If you are going for a more stylized look the outline is fine. You might want (ha, ha) to try two types of light bulbs. Very realistic (like your soda bottles) and a more stylized outline version like you have. Then you can test both of them out.